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Style: Passive Voice
Here's an example from the
"Channeling" memo of the Selective Service (1965), describing how
certain men in scientific and technological jobs receive deferments, while
others are "channeled" into the military:
This deferment is accomplished on
the basis of evidence of record in each individual case. No group deferments
are permitted. Deferments are granted, however, in a realistic
atmosphere so that the fullest effect of channeling will be felt,
rather than be terminated by military service at too early a time.
Here the passive voice permits the Selective
Service Board to hide behind impersonal language. Passive voice is the
language of the done-to;
A registrar reading this memo would not
know who was doing what to whom, only that some vast bureaucratic
process was at work which might draft him.
Sometimes the language of the done-to is
useful:
The Vietnam memorial bears the names of
those who were killed in the war. The
houses were covered in snow up to the windows.
More often, the active voice helps illustrate
the agent and the effects of action.
Lucy was bitten by the vampire and
transformed into a vamp.
The vampire bit Lucy, transforming her into a vamp.
It was arranged that Senator
Flugelhorn be summoned before the subcommittee to answer certain
charges which had been brought against him by his former aides.
The subcommittee summoned Senator
Flugelhorn to answer charges made by his former aides.
Passive
Voice
Intransitive
Verbs
Too
Many Little Words
Adverbitis
Hitchhikers,
Babblers, and Jaw-Flappers
Windy
and Pretentious Language
Balance
and Consistency
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