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Style: Adverbitis
Whom would you believe, someone who said
simply
"I love you"
or someone who said
"I really and sincerely love you
very much"?
Think about it. The adverbs "really"
and "sincerely" modify "love" -- they are helping
"love" along. "Love," then, needs help in this sentence.
Perhaps the speaker is sincere, but his propping up the verb with two adverbs
and an adverbial phrase ("very much") might make us doubt it.
Adverbs, used effectively, say how, when, in
what manner, place, and direction something happens or gets done. They add
color and flavor to verbs:
Fearfully she flipped on the light.
They support adjectives:
We were almost drunk.
They give mood to whole sentences:
Gradually I grew suspicious, and began to
make enquiries about his alibi.
However, used too often, they suggest that a
writer is spinning the wheels of the verb, straining for effect:
The couple in front of us was necking
passionately, and we were really annoyed that we couldn't exactly see what
was happening in the movie.
One adverb per sentence, in this case
"passionately," will do. Check to see if the verbs express strong
meaning, and don't inhibit them by belaboring that strength. Avoid
"definitely," "truly," "really,"
"very," unless you are using them to make an action more precise:
Not: I definitely hated that exam.
("hated" makes the point)
But: The exam asked me to speak definitely about the suffragists.
Passive
Voice
Intransitive
Verbs
Too
Many Little Words
Adverbitis
Hitchhikers,
Babblers, and Jaw-Flappers
Windy
and Pretentious Language
Balance
and Consistency
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